Hey Guys! So last week was my birthday and I decided to have a birthday party on Friday and Saturday! I invited three of my close friends and we had a blast! My mom got us loads of candy and chips, but who’s complaining? My one friend had to go home early because she couldn’t sleep over, so that kind of stunk. We ate candy and pizza and chips, drank soda, watched TV, and talked a lot! My mom said we could stay up, and we totally did! We literally stayed up till about 2:30 AM, and it wasn’t very hard because when our energy ran out the energy from the candy kicked in. Then we had a major dance party and the FaceTimed and texted a person for about two hours, and our conversation was interesting. When we decided to go to bed, I was the first one to fall asleep. When we woke up my mom made us waffles for breakfast and then we went outside to skateboard. Then we came in and watched TV for a little while. I decided that my room looked like trash so we cleaned that mess up a little bit. Unfortunately, they had to go home at 12:30, so that made me sad.
Once I got home from dropping my friends off, I had to pack an overnight bag because my sister and I were sleeping over at our parent’s friends house while they went out for a night. Our parent’s friends came and picked us up and drove us to their house. We played outside and had a great time. Then we went shopping for things for dinner, and that probably took no more than 30 minutes. Around 8:00 PM we went downstairs and ate popcorn and trail mix and watched TV. I ended up going to sleep around 10:30, so the next day I was pretty tired. I woke up and went downstairs to the smell of bacon. I ate my breakfast and then my parent’s friend gave me some nail polish and I did my nails. She had some very pretty colors! Then we played outside for two hours and then went to Dairy Queen for lunch. I got some chicken tender and fries and then saved some fries for my blizzard. I ended up getting a cotton candy blizzard, which was delicious! Then we went home and my dad picked me and my sister up. I had a lot of fun this weekend but now I am very tired. I really hope you had a good weekend too! Bye!
Wow Athena! It sounds like you had avery interesting weekend even though I was there. This was a very good blog post but three ways you could make it better are by using Star, Wish, and Wonder.
Star: I love how you used percise details from your weekend
Wish: N/A
Wonder: I wonder what show/movie you watched
Star: It looks like you had a awesome birthday. I like how you added what you did on you birthday and what you did after.
Wish: I wish you would’ve added who you had at your birthday party.
Wonder: I wonder if you guys did anything else for your birthday.
Dear Athena,
I really like your post, you have such a great, organized way of writing. I wish you would’ve read through your post when you were done, because I saw a few mistakes. i wonder how you liked the fries with your cotton candy blizzard?
Sincerely,
Brandon
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I liked how you added a lot of detail to your weekend and what you did. I wish you could have done more stuff so I could keep on reading. I wonder what your favorite part of your weekend was?