Runaway Orphans Chapter 4

“Maybe.” Said Abigail. “I don’t know, but Hopefully.” CREEK “Mark!?! “Sorry” They heard footsteps outside. “Come on Mark now we’re trapped!” “What are we going to do?” Said Mark. “Hide” Abby said, “Someone’s coming. Where should we hide?” “Let’s hide behind the shelf ” “Ok” Mark said “Oh, I don’t think there is enough room”, Mark said. “Yes there is just get behind it.” Abby said. “Fine were going to get squished”. “At least it’s a place to hide” Said Mark. they snuck over to the shelf and hide in the small gap. “Oh no my foot sticks out” said Abby “it’s ok” Mark said “as long as he does not see us”.

5 seconds later, the door opened from the other side of the room and a tall, skinny figure walked in. He started walking towards them. He picked up a couple of papers out of the printer and then said “No no noooo, this is not right, it has to in color, Arrrggg” just then he walked over to the printer and put a paper back in and clicked a bunch of buttons. Then he went over to the shelf to get the color and then the kids threw a paint bucket at the printer, threw the shelf holes and broke the printer. “What!” he yelled “My printer!!” he started to look around for something that that could throw a paint bucket. At that moment Abby tripped over a rock behind the shelf and fell into a hole that was covered in blankets “AAAAAAAAAA” Her voice slowly faded as she fell until he could not hear her anymore ”Gulp” Mark swallows hard “ Get caught or go down a hole i don’t not know where it goes” “MARK COME ON IT’S SAFE” “OK” “WHAT HOW DID YOU ESCAPE KIDS!!!” “None of your business buddy” Mark jelled as he went down the tunnel.
The tunnel went on forever as they slid down and then all of the sudden they heard a ear splitting POP!!!! Then Mark jelled “OWWW MY EARS” “Shhhh we want him to think we are dead”.


  1. I like your story Draven It was really great but I think you could have started a little differently. Some glows is that it had a lot of detail but some diddn’t make much since but other than that it was really interesting. By the way its Kiera and i’m at my new school and it is sorta fun i guess.


  2. think kind of at the end you made a typo you said Mark jelled


  3. I like the story. It’s interesting and got me hooked. It has a lot of spelling, grammar, and punctuation mistakes, but other than that it’s great. Keep it up!

    – Mae


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