We live in candy land!!
We live in candy land
By: Sammy.S and Caden.
We live in the gingerbread house. down candy lane just pass Mr. Gummy Bears house. Mr. Gummybear is such a nice guy. And he always gives us gummy bears to eat. We also have a neighbor and her name is Mrs. Smarty she is a very smart person she even wears glasses to prove she’s smart by the way there fake glasses. Then there’s Mr. M&M He’s a fighter Then Mr. M&M has a neighbor her name is Jawbreaker and she tries to break people’s jaws she’s very mean. Then there’s Mr.Hershey bar she’s the most best person in the world she’s super super nice. And then there’s Mr.sweet tart and he likes to play baseball he’s very good. We all go see him play baseball he lives next to Mr. lollipop he has a very big head. Then Mrs. Candy Hearts she gives lots of love. Then one day a big monster came and ate Mr. Sweet tart and everyone was very upset and then the monster started eating all the good people and the candy land was evil land now and there was only bad people in the world, and then the world was blown up by Mr. M&M.
Hey Sam it’s Brooklynn, And I want to say you made me hungry. WHY!! I wish you added more about them. I wonder if you can make bigger stories. please come visit my blog at: http://blog.elanco.org/groff67c/ Thanks don’t forget to comment!!
I liked your story, but I wish you would tell me what happen in candy land before every thing got destroyed. I wonder what will happen next? Please come to my blog at http://blog.elanco.org/kauffm563/
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I like your story about Candy Land
But how can you think of Candy word
To make this even better you could use some more discriptive
I like this piece of writing. Can you add a bit more detail?? You could’ve added more description like scrumptious,delicious,or colourful.
i like how they all have candy names but you need to tell more about them
Hey, Kayley i agree… Thanks for commenting on my blog i went to your blog and commented go check them out. 🙂
hey sammie its kayley and on the trip it only took 1 hour and i love this story
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Hi I like the story and I wish that you would of put a little more and I wonder if you wanted to do this story or if caden wanted to do this story come to my blog please here it is http://blog.elanco.org/BairT90/ . 🙂
Hi it’s Luke, I like the part where you explained the candy people and their characteristics! But I kinda thought that you would have the monster get defeated. And why was Mr. Sweet Tart good at baseball, sweet tarts have nothing to do with baseball?