Bob started out by trying and trying and he got it just right here’s how he did it. First, bob diden’t know what to do in soccer but he never gave up. So he played he got better by then it was his last game so he had to win he’d get a gold trophy.Next, So they played it was 21 to 23 he was winning.It’s almost the end of the game he said the reifery said STOP! And he won so he got the gold trophy. Last,That is how he won somthing. The End.
I like how you put the order that the story took place in.
I wish you would have put more detail.
I wonder why you named your character Bob.
I named him bob because that is going to be my new husky’s name