FW 3/18/16 Tyler Mu.

The worst thing happened to me today. A giant almost ate me alive! I had to run and…. (freeze) So your wondering why i’m telling you this. It’s kind of sort of because I climbed up a beanstalk and found a castle with a giant in it. The giant was fierce, mighty, and very strong. I dont know how he caught up, he was so super slow. But at one point, there was a kid named jack. Jack came out, slayed the giant, and then dug a cloud grave. Even though he almost ate me alive, we said our goodbyes. Good times, Good times. (Unfreeze.) He tried to eat me. I also couldn’t run, hide, or do anything to stop him. But Jack came and slayed him. I was so scared i ran home and promised myself I would not tell anyone anything about this.

One thought on “FW 3/18/16 Tyler Mu.

  1. Hi Tyler,

    I’m Dee White and I’m an Australian author with 16 books published for kids and teens. I blog at http://deescribewriting.wordpress.com and http://writingclassesforkids.com where I sometimes run free writing competitions for kids as well. You can find out more about me and my work at my website http://www.deescribe.com.au

    I’m really happy to be part of the Student Blogging 2016 Challenge and I really like your blog. It’s very clear and easy to read.

    I really enjoyed reading your story. You have a great imagination. I really liked the action in your piece and the cloud grave that Jack dug for the giant.

    There’s plenty of action in this story, which is great. If you wanted to develop it more you could add in more descriptions of things like what the giant looked like. You could also show the reader exactly how Jack killed the giant. What sort of weapon did he use? Was it a fierce battle? Did Jack almost get caught?

    I can tell from your blog picture that you like basketball. Do you play? What team do you play for?

    I’m looking forward to reading more of your blog.

    Dee

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