glass exploion

   Have you ever had a glass a explanation in your kitchen? Well,I have ,and my  brother and sister almost got hurt.It happened one Late morning Was playing with my remote control car ,and my remote control army tank. My car is red and blue wit fire strips on both sides. I was playing with them in the the living room.After little while I asked my brother and sister if they while  I asked my brother and sister if they wanted to play board games. They said yes so we decided to play uno. We decided to play . We play only one game if uno and then we decide to play Jenga. My brother made it fall so he Tostitos the game . After playing Jenga, I went to the kitchen to see what my my was cooking.she told me she was going to make a pizza for lunch.lunch. She preheats the  oven then she realizes there were pants still inside the over that she did not take out she sees a glass pan sitting on the bottom of the the oven. That she did not take out . She sees a glass pan sitting on the bottom of the oven.my mom tried to remove the glass pan but couldn’t because it was already melted to the bottom .she decided to tum off the oven door .thn minutes later ,she glass pan exploded.glass was everything. Was all over the floor,in the oven ,an angry voice she told us to go into the living room she could it up the glass.After evening was cleaned up ,she put the pizza. She made in the oven. Once the pizza was finished cooking ,we all eat lunch together. We decided to watch a movie as we eat lunch.

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  • March 28, 2018 at 1:39 pm
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    I like the story but, you do not need all of the commas in your writing. You didn’t finish the word with in the 3rd line. The beginning of sentence 6 dose not make that much sense. You wrote two my’s at the end of the 7th sentence. Capital She at beginning of line 8. You wrote lunch two times on line 8. You need a capital M on line 11 and check for capitals in the beginning of you sentences. But I do love the story and what you wrote.

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